The luxury of heat

A 100 word challenge using the word prompt ‘Heat’. I found it very tricky to tell enough of a story in just 100 words. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

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The luxury of heat

Jane had travelled so long in cold winds that her room seemed like a slice of heaven. Jane luxuriated in the heat. The rich red of matching furnishings added to the feeling of warmth. Jane needed to pass through Benson before the winter settled in, making the small roads impassable. She had lingered too long with her family and now travelled against strong winds that flung the first fall of snow into a great blizzard around her. It would be another four days before she might reach Benson and then two more days before she would return to the university.

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10 thoughts on “The luxury of heat

    1. πŸ™‚ I think i may incorporate this idea in a novel at some point, perhaps the one i have just started mind mapping ideas for. Glad you liked it πŸ˜€ πŸ™‚

  1. Sounds to be the beginning of a great adventure. I like my weather warm but not too hot. My wonky thyroid makes me run hot as it is, then throw perimenopause on top of that…not good times in weather much over 80 degrees.

    1. Thank you, yes i do think this may end up being expanded and used in a novel or short story πŸ™‚
      Oh no i can imagine you wouldnt enjoy the warmer weather 😦 hope you can find a nice cool room to sit in with a fan!

  2. I like the detail of the rich red furnishings – I can feel the luxurious warmth.

    At the end we’re told “it would be four days…and then two more days…”. I think this might be reinforced by giving a clue to her emotions about this, e.g. it could be “two delicious days until she had to leave again”. Or maybe she is sad angry with herself for leaving it late, and curtailing her time there?

    1. Thank you for the feedback πŸ™‚ she has to travel for another 6 days, 4 before she gets to the pass and then another 2 so I think you’re right about adding a little of her feelings on such a dangerous journey ahead of her with no more inn’s to stop at for shelter. Thank you again!

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