Ok i wasn’t happy with my earlier poem and have been working on it to already come up with what i think is a better structured poem. Please let me know what you think, which works best?


Glistening, Jewels poised mid fall

Like beads from a chandelier

Defying gravity’s pull

Resisting, with all their strength


These see-through spheres cast out brilliant light.

Combining together they grow in size

Then gravity wins the fight.


Raindrop once poised, to earth is now bound

Racing head first and blurring in sight

Beauty here no longer found


Glistening, jewels poised mid fall

The beauty is but a moment

The rush of the world returns

Sighing, I move on with life


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